His Biggest Fear reviews

That was really good for a while, the wording and they way you described everything. It got sloppy at the end, you were too blunt during the sex. I suggest you take a little more time and explain the sexual encounter with the same symbolism you used earlier in the story, and maybe talk about the morning...Unless you plan to write a second chapter.

Ahah...I dont get it...the beginning had a little too much symbolism if you ask me, very confusing.

I liked it until the ending. Total mood killer. What happened? It was so filled with love and fear, everything that a relationship has. This would of been a favorite of mine if the ending didn't suck so badly. =\

not very interesting to read